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what are advantages and disadvantages of using smart devices?

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It is a fact that in recent years, some children spend a huge amount of
time
 per day on using
smartphones
 or other intelligent devices
such
 as laptops.
This
 trend will introduce both pros and cons, but I am in an agreement that the benefits do outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, using
smartphones
 and other smart devices constantly would bring several disadvantages. One evident disadvantage is that children are able to be addicted. It means that children will spend almost their
time
 on using
smartphones
 or laptops
instead
 of spending
time
on
Suggestion
at
 participating other healthy activities
such
 as reading books.
This
 causes their low score in school and affects their concentration when they study in traditional ways without technology.
Moreover
, when children use
smartphones
 or laptops uncontrollably, their health will be affected badly.
For example
, if a child sits in front of the screen of
smartphones
 or computers perennially, his eyes will be tired and even cause short-sightedness.
On the other hand
, I argue that using
smartphones
 or smart devices a lot would bring more benefits. The
first
 great advantage is that smart devices can develop children's creativity and imagination. It means that children's brain can absorb vivid images and sounds through their eyes and ears, which can help children know more about the world with a variety of topics. The
second
 advantage is that children who live far from their family can keep in touch with their parents easily by
smartphones
 or laptops.
For instance
, parents or grandparents can control their children's safety easily and effectively. Some people argue that using
smartphones
constantly is
Suggestion
is constantly being
 a great distraction for children's studying. I suppose that children nowadays can study online with a lot of reliable sources of information, so children can learn online
by
Suggestion
with
 their
smartphones
 or computers. In conclusion, spending much
time
 on using
smartphones
 or other smart devices would bring more positive aspects for children
although
 there are several notable downsides.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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