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some people say that traveling abroad is necessary to get knowledge about other countries,while others suggest that TV and the internet can also help people know about forein countries. Discuss both view and give your own opinion

There is a huge debate on the topic that a person can gain more knowledge
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 travelling to foreign countries
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 others say that they can
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 collect a large amount of information on TV or social media.
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 my point of view, the latter statement is more considerable. First and foremost, no doubt we can acquire accurate knowledge physically by travelling, but that's an expensive way, an average household cannot afford and will prefer to explore the countries through the
internet
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 or websites.
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, during the travelling we can face major problems,
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, a person can feel ill, or can suffer from Body fatigue after returning from the Trip.
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 searching through the
internet
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, it not only saves our time but
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 provides a huge amount of information about that topic
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 3D Pictures that look the same as the real place
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, with the help of the
internet
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, we can read or listen about the foreign Countries' past /present conditions in any language we want, or we
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 get some platforms that translate languages and provide the proper amount and correct definitions.
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,
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 travelling, it's much more complicated to visit the places as there is so much crowd, and sometimes we have to pay extra
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 purchasing near the historic places, which is a waste of money. In conclusion, no doubt that visiting a place is a lifetime memory that stays with a person forever, but the cheapest and best way to know about the whole world is the
internet
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 and TV.

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Plan your essay with a clear start, middle, and end. Put one idea per paragraph and use a simple topic sentence.
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In each paragraph, stick to one main point. Then add how this point helps your view.
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Use short, plain sentences. Check for grammar and spelling to avoid mistakes.
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Give a clear example for each point and explain why it supports your view.
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You show both sides and give your own view.
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You mention how the internet and TV can help learn about other places.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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