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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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people
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 say that the optimal method to receive
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 is journals.
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, some argue that they can obtain
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 more effectively through other
media
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. From my point of view, I have completely come to an agreement that learning through other
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 will be the better option. On the one hand, the option
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 through articles is appealing for several reasons.
Firstly
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, it is undeniable that news
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newspapers
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 is more reliable than other kinds of
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. Because
newspapers
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 are administered by
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 and verified by a professional team, the
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 is always neutral and accurate.
Secondly
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,
newspapers
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 are the kind of
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that is
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 suitable for everyone, including elders, middle-aged
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, and youngsters. In terms of elders, since they are familiar with
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, it is difficult for them to use the technology for other
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.
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, there are some reasons why I support the side of learning through other
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.
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, other
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 brings a great deal of
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,
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 daily news, to
people
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.
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, in terms of social
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 or TV, they always update social skills, lifestyles, entertainment and scientific documents, which attract plenty of
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audiences, especially teenagers.
As a consequence
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,
people
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 can obtain other helpful
information
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 and teenagers have a better studying foundation.
Secondly
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, other
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 updates
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and, latest
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latest
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the latest
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information
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 and spread to
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 immediately.
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, it is convenient for
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 to receive
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anywhere and anytime.
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,
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 can use their mobile phones to get updated
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 travelling or chatting with friends.
To conclude
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, both schemes seem to have their own merits.
However
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, I personally think learning news through other
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 is more effective when
people
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 are living in society 4.0 -
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a society
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 of
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 and technology

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news coverage
  • perspectives
  • opinions
  • accessed
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • real-time
  • multimedia
  • combination
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