The traditional life style of local people in developing countries is attracting and increasing the number of tourists to the countries which has the effect of preventing local people changing to modern ways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is an irrefutable fact that the trend of the changing world from traditional to modern technology is increasing day by day. Becoming into the modern world
attract
Correct subject-verb agreement
attracts
the
people from outside, Correct article usage
apply
as well as
affecting the traditional culture and force
them to turn into Wrong verb form
forcing
modern
way. In my opinion, I agree with the statement and in Correct article usage
the modern
this
essay, I intend to explain my view before reasonable
conclusion can be drawn.
There are several reasons why it is possible to change people and their traditional methods. Add an article
a reasonable
Firstly
, nowadays every country wants to change in
their lifestyle and infrastructure to make Change preposition
apply
easy
for everyone and develop their economic growth. Because of Correct pronoun usage
it easy
this
, everyone attracts
towards Wrong verb form
is attracted
the
new buildings and new technology, which make Correct article usage
apply
them
easier Correct pronoun usage
apply
folk’s
Change noun form
folk
life
, Fix the agreement mistake
lives
such
as underground metro trains, wending machines and so on. According to
the research conducted by the Indian government found that after the rebuilt of outside the golden temple
in Amritsar Correct your spelling
Golden Temple
city
, the lifestyle of Capitalize word
City
local
community Correct article usage
the local
becomes
more convenient and more tourists Wrong verb form
became
are coming
from other nations.
On the other side, these things Wrong verb form
came
effected
continuously on the local person Verb problem
have
as well as
their old traditional ways. Moreover
,Some people assert that the
renovating old cultural Correct article usage
apply
building
could bad impact on the next generation, like forgetting the history of the country. For Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
an
instance, Correct article usage
apply
remodel
the Wrong verb form
remodelling
wild life
century in India Correct your spelling
wildlife
create
a bad impact on Verb problem
had
the
wild animals Correct article usage
apply
such
as camouflage
of the national bird Peacock.
To put Correct article usage
the camouflage
in
a nutshell, I Correct pronoun usage
it in
pen down
and say that introducing Verb problem
apply
with
the modern way is good for Change preposition
apply
comprehensive
growth of the nation. But, the government should focus on the traditional lifestyle.Correct article usage
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