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The chart below show the percentage of fatal accidents by locations in a European country. The survey was conducted in 2000.

The chart below show the percentage of fatal accidents by locations in a European country. The survey was conducted in 2000.
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The given bar chart provides information on the rural and urban percentage of fatal
accidents
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 in a European country in the year 2000. The chart showed that in rural areas, with
high speed
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high-speed
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 limits, the intensity of
life taking
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life-taking
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 crashes was very high.
Speed
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The speed
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 limit of 30
mph
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 or less caused around 24℅ fatal
accidents
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, which was the least, followed by
35
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a 35
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-40
mph
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 limit where the mortality caused was about 31℅. In
case
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the case
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 of 45-50
mph
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, the percentage of death causing
accidents
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 was nearly 50℅.
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, it soared to 81℅ when the speed limit was 55
mph
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 but surprisingly, in the case of 60
mph
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 or more the fatal crash proportion was lesser and at nearly 70℅. The scene in urban areas is almost the opposite, at 30
mph
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 or less speed,
death causing
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accidents
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 stood at 75℅,
whereas
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 at 36-40
mph
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 it was at 68℅. In
case
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the case
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 of 45-50
mph
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, it was at 52℅ and it shrunk to 18℅ at 55
mph
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 and
then
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 it increased to almost 28℅ at 60
mph
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 or more. The bar chart reveals that chances of mortality were higher at high
speed
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speeds
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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, contrary to city
area
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areas
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 where more chances of casualty were noted at lesser speeds.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words accidents, mph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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