Write about the following topic. Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion is an important part of life. Discuss both these views and give your ouwn opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many

people

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today are interested in

fashion

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because it

became

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has become

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an important part of our lives even though it costs a

lot

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of

money

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but, in

reality

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reality,

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many

people

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are busy

with

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apply

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thinking about it.

First,

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fashion

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cost

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costs

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a

lot

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of

money

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, but

this

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depends on whether the

person

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is rich or poor because the rich

person

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can buy everything.

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, a

lot

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of

people

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in our world love new

fashion

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and are willing to pay a

lot

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of

money

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for them because it is addictive for them,

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: I had a friend who

he

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apply

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didn't have much

money

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but he liked

fashion

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so he took

money

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from his friends to buy his new stuff.

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in

fact

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fact,

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the poor

person

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pays his

money

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for the requirements of his daily life,

such

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as food, because

anyway

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he cannot pay the cost of

fashion

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because he

didn’t

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doesn’t

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have enough

money

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.

However

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,

fashion

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is very expensive nowadays because manufacturers pay a

lot

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of millions to

making

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make

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them.

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, it is acceptable because it is an important part of our life But

this

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also

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depends on the type of

person

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,

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, actors and celebrities pay a

lot

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of

money

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for

fashion

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because they care about how

people

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see them and want to keep the number 1.

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Also

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the manager who has a business meeting must wear

a

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apply

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modern clothes because the other

person

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will see him as an elegant

person

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and

then

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they will do a big work between them. In my opinion,

fashion

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costs a

lot

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of

money

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, but it is an important part of our lives because at

this

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time a

person

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has to keep pace with the development of

fashion

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because we are in the twentieth century because it is the age of

fashion

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.