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some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere to what extent do you agree with this view?

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Nowadays, all countries devote a part of the annual budget in the field of the arts. In the essay we discuss about the advantage and disadvantage of spending money in the arts by governments.
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 of all, I consider the arts to be a way for increasing creativity. Art can change our view about the universe and can raise wisdom in people and make a better society. In from the point of my view, the arts are a way of sending a message to other people in the world, no matter what language they speak. We can mention to caricatures published by social media and newspapers or a lot of songs by singers etc. In my view, the arts are not basic needs and giving huge money in some circumstances can cause some problems, especially in a country dealing with poverty, famine or disease. To conclude, the arts have so many beneficiaries and is good that countries devote some budget for that. The arts should consider as a need in society alongside other need like food or health.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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