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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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In
this
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 modern era, it has become difficult to teach discipline to the children. Some parents consider punishment to be an effective way to train their children to obey rules.
This
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 essay will argue why smacking is completely unacceptable in the terms of train child discipline.
To begin
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 with, some parents believe that punishment is a perfect way to teach their children how to follow the rules. They are justifiably worried about teaching the rules to their children that could make them good human being.
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, they naturally feel to make their kids educated.
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, a recent survey describes that 90% parents admit that if they will punish their child physically,
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 there will be more chances for that kid to learn accurately and
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 it will create a sense of fear, and they will do nothing wrong. These few instances have created an existing thought among parents that smacking their children is the best way in the terms to teach discipline to their kids.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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