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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is beter to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

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Schools have different strategies for choosing their
students
. Some think that high academic ability is the most important factor,
while
 others believe that
students
 with different abilities should be educated together.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide evidence as to why classifying
students
 based on their educational abilities is superior. Having a variety of
students
 from different levels of skills in classes can be advantageous for both higher and lower-level
students
. They can try to identify their weaknesses by discussing different topics and courses.
For instance
, a student with difficulties in algebra can seek help from his friend who has a top score in
this
 topic;
on the other hand
, he can
also
 improve and revise his knowledge by explaining again. In short, different
students
 in a class can help each other to grow together;
however
,
this
 can cause anxiety for weaker
students
. Selecting pupils based on their academic ability can seem to be discriminating, but it ensures that each student receives education based on his or her needs.
For example
, repeating basic concepts that are necessary for an ordinary student can be tedious for a brilliant one. By separating
students
, a teacher can identify the problems and weaknesses of the class and provide more reinforcement classes to boost their grades. In the meantime, the top class can focus on advanced concepts to make progress faster. In conclusion, each school has a different way of pupil selection, but I believe that categorizing
students
 based on their grades and academic skills is the best
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 since it contributes to the well-being of
students
especially
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 the weak ones, and it decreases the teachers' work by giving them
opportunity
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 to just focus on the same level of
students
.
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Consider adding more detailed examples to support your points. This will strengthen your arguments and provide clearer illustrations of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a smooth logical flow between paragraphs. Transitions between ideas can be made clearer with the use of linking words.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented. They clearly outline and summarize the main points of the essay.
task achievement
The main points are balanced in your discussion of both views on student selection.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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