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Billions of dollars are being wasted each year in space research . The money could be better used to improve conditions on eart. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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What is
universe
Suggestion
the universe
a universe
? Are we alone in the
universe
? These questions are always raised by the people to solve the puzzles of
universe
Suggestion
the universe
 every year millions and billions dollars are being spent by countries.
However
, some people believe that
money
 could be immensely handy if it spend for mankind, living organism and to enhance the beauty of out planet. I partly agree with
this
 school of thought. Many people are curious to enrich their knowledge about planets, galaxies as well as is the life exist somewhere or we are alone?. To find the appropriate answers many organizations are working together and giving their best.
Moreover
,
space
 research programs are highly imperative, in the
last
 decade, scientists resolved many mysteries
such
 as some years ago people believed only seven galaxies are exist, but with the aid of humble telescope we came to know there are numerous galaxies, stars and planets.
Furthermore
, NASA
(
Accept space
(
national aeronautics and
space
 administration) proved that
money
 spent on
space
 projects is worthwhile when they launched their robot on mars surface to seek the possibilities of life over there. For epitome, Neil Armstrong was the
first
 person who landed on the surface of the moon and he set the example for the whole mankind
On the other hand
, no doubt there id advancement in science, but some parts of the world people are starving and prone to famine and dyeing.
For example
, in Somalia many people forced to live in worse places
as a result
 of
this
 it gives the birth of critical diseases
such
 as Ebola, corona virus
,
Accept space
,
SARS etc. Even though, logging are being done on a high level, which is the main problem of pollution and
also
 putting the lives of animal in imperil
,
Accept space
,
so the
money
 should be given to the needy persons.
Last
 but not least
,
Accept space
,
some nations are not affluent to provide the rudimentary things to their citizens and their youngsters get deprived of
educationbin order
Suggestion
the educationbin order
 of that illiteracy and poverty are rising. In conclusion,
money
 should be spent by taking ponder whether on
space
 research programs or for global issues but giving the
money
 only one side is not productive both matters are vital,so i partly agree with
this
 school of thought that
money
 should not be spent on
universe
 research projects
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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