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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing their levels of habits health and fitness are decreasing cause and solution.

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It is a matter of concern that the majority of People in some nations addressed the increase in their normal weight. Due to that a large number of people are facing various health issues there are several reasons for
such
 situation and
also
 some visible instruments to both the aspects are explained in the ensuing paragraph along with the solution regarding
this
 matter. Discussing the reasons the most common is that people do not have spare
time
 in their life for doing exercise or yoga because of the hectic schedule of their office and lots of work that they have to do before the given
time
, made their life full of mess.
Moreover
, they do not have fixed timing of taking a meal by which day come across plenty of health problems. The other causes that referring fast food over green leafy vegetables. Since nowadays due to scarcity of
time
 everyone prefer to take food from the shops like McDonald's, KFC in much more because off because their food seems to be very healthy and good, but in reality, it did not fulfil our daily need of nutrition and mineral result of which our body goes through several impacts.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
 to tackle
this
 situation and individual should join a gym or a Yoga Centre through which he/she remained consistent toward that work and within 2-3 months feel the change in their life another thing is if a person does not have
time
then
 that person can opt walking when he/she is commuting to order
this
 office.
Thus
, to conclude the topic is can be
finally
 commented that I understand our daily work are essential, but
besides
this
, we should not forget about our health.

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