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People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Even in our modern society,
one
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 cannot deny that luck sometimes has been considered in relation to
success
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. But many people are of the belief that
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 is the prize, which only hard workers may achieve in their life. In
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 essay the reasons why I agree with the latter idea.
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 of all, in my perspective working harder may increase the chance of
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. As a matter of fact it works as a lottery machine which can print lots of chance cards for a person and make him a winner.
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, those who works more than usual employees (10-12 hours a day) will have double chances than the ones who leave work earlier (6 hours a day)
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The proportions of reaching a goal are much higher when you try different routes to it. Working harder
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 way is rather more related to
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 than
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 around searching for luck in order to bring fortune into your life.
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, the term
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 in my believe is no about the short term goals like money and
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 about the long term ones which are constructing an infrastructure of achievements in our life. Something that can't be demolished easily.
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 a successful businessman like an entrepreneur isn't the rich
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, but the
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 who can gather himself up after each failure. A hardworking characteristic always makes his effort until he achieve what is determined to be achieved, While
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 the lucky
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 don't understand the value of his mistakes and may break behind an easy obstacle in his career leading to losing his job. In conclusion working hard has an
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incapable of adapting or changing to meet circumstances
unbending
unbinding
unending
 relationship with the correct meaning of
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. The more We go deeper the less We found luck in relation with
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • succeed
  • hard work
  • luck
  • success
  • view
  • opinion
  • essential
  • factor
  • chances
  • temporary
  • advantage
  • sustained
  • combination
  • develop
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • crucial
  • opportunities
  • individuals
  • make the most of
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