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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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There is an issue of
hungry which
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hungry, which
 is still
maintain
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maintained
 in the
world despite
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world, despite
 the development of agriculture.
This
 is because the increase of
population
 around the
world
 is faster than the improvement of science and
technology
. The
problem
 could be contained by stimulating
technology developing
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technology, developing
 and investing it in poor areas. The
population
 of the
world
 has a significant boost in recent one hundred years. Some researchers might argue that there is a negative increase of the
population
 in some states,
such
 as Japan and Germany.
However
, from the macro-prospective of the
world
, the rate of birth is much higher than the motility rate in recent tens of decades, especially in many developing countries. According to the records of human history, there were 1.6 billion people living in the
world
 at the end of
World
 War two, while the
population
 of the
world
 is 7 billion at the moment which is four times
of
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in
 the 70 years ago.
Instead
, the ability of food production has not jumped like that, and
this
 results in the hungry
problem
 remaining.
However
, it is possible to solve
this
 issue
that is
 continually developing technologies and invest the new achievement in those undeveloped areas. The areas of the
population
 growth are mainly from Africa and Latin America.
In addition
, science and
technology
 are very poor in those countries. Introducing more developed new science and
technology
, and even establishing the modern education system in those nations which is important to help them to develop agriculture.
For example
, there are some high technologies that can plant in the mountains or deserts from Japan and Israel. If those
third
world
 countries could control
such
 relevant knowledge, it will be very helpful for them to solve the
problem
 of hungry. In conclusion, the hungry
problem
 still existed because of the quicker speed of the
population's
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population
 increase, and we can address it by keeping exploring new technologies and investing some mature equipment and knowledge
into
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in
 developing countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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