Some people believe that it is good to share as much as information possible in scientific

The advent of mobile phones, computers and
internet
Suggestion
the internet
have dramatically changed the ways in which
information
is shared.
Information
in
Suggestion
on
scientific research, business and the academic world can be published as well as accessed within seconds with the help of internet. Though it has made life much easier, I think that certain
information
which is too
important
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importantly
or too valuable should strictly be maintained confidential. Sensitive
information
, if made available freely can easily fall
in
Suggestion
into
wrong hands
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the wrong hands
, which could lead to disastrous consequences.
For example
, in 2017, hackers stole constructional drawings of weapons from the Indian army's database. These drawings were used by terrorist organisations and weapons similar to these drawings were
confesticated
take temporary possession of as a security, by legal authority
confiscated
in numerous raids carried out between 2018 and 2019.
Thus
, it is crucial that certain
information
should be strictly maintained confidential.
On the other hand
, some people believe that
information
should be shared freely.
Information
, when made available freely gives global access and more potential
of
Suggestion
for
further
development. In conclusion, I feel that the confidentiality of certain sensitive
information
should strictly be maintained. Certain areas of safety and
secutiy
the state of being free from danger or injury
security
cannot be compromised at any cost.

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