The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.
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The table illustrates the percentage of students who went to four types of secondary school from 2000 until 2009. It is evident that in 2000, the voluntary-controlled
schools
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had the biggest share in the mentioned year. In 2005, voluntary-controlled
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and
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schools
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were approximately
dominant
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types. In 2009,
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schools
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by far were the biggest portion
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to the other three types. In 2000, specialist
schools
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have the least share with 12 % and we can see the same percentage for
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schools
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.
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, voluntary
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possessed the largest portion with 52 % and grammar
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were 24 % in the figure. In 2008, specialist
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stay relatively the same around 11 %
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and
voluntary- controlled
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schools
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saw a dramatic decline
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19 % and 38% respectively.
Community
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schools
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rose significantly to 32%. In 2009, grammar
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and
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voluntary–controlled
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schools
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followed the same pattern
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2008
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and declined
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community
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schools
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continued
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upward trend and rose to 58%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, community with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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