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In order to improve a contry's education system youg students should be allowed to openly criticize their teachers during class time. What is your opinion? What are some other ways education system could be improved?

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Education
 is backbone for particular countries. Many people say that to improve quality of
education
 and
student
 should be given rights to point out their
faculty
 during lectures. I will give my personal opinion on that idea and as well as will try to give some technique to improve. It is wrong, The
student
 are torching their teachers while running lecture because of the
faculty
 feel that they going improper way and their idea is irrelevant. So that they feel why I give right thought of those students.
Firstly
, teachers is
most important
Suggestion
more important
 for
next generation
Suggestion
the next generation
 and those are one the vital man in society, they make society, even if they want to destroy the nation as well.
Secondly
,
student
Suggestion
students
the student
 should follow instruction properly and establish peace during lectures and give more respect. So that,
faculty
 can full of concentration on a particular topic and give a relevant idea of those contents.
Moreover
, India believes that teachers are as Jupiter of students so we give respect and obey their instructions.
On the other hand
, some people say that
education system
Suggestion
the education system
 is not proper. The government should improve quality of
education
.
Firstly
,
education system
Suggestion
the education system
 should be uniform
education
 in all over the nation. So that all the
student
Suggestion
students
 can get proper knowledge.
Secondly
, they should strict eye on
education
 model and hire talented teachers and well qualified staff and increase the salary of faculties.
Also they
Accept comma addition
Also, they
 provide free
education
 till graduate so that all the students can get a chance to study. I opine that,
student
Suggestion
students
a student
the student
 should not torturing of their
faculty
 during class time and government should improve
education system
Suggestion
the education system
 and provide relevant facility students and even faculties.

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