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Nowadays there are many TV shows where the stars are ordinary people rather than professional actors. What are the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Ordinary individuals: nowadays, have become show stars
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 of professional actors. There are many reasons for
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 , and both have good and bad consequences. These days, in
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 programs, ordinary
people
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 are playing roles rather than
professionals
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. There are many reasons for that
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, the main one is to make movies look more natural and realistic , as individuals are
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professionals
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 in some field.
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, bloggers or other
professionals
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 can play roles in their work and give their full emotions. The second main cause is to make individuals' life more better and show their correct position.
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, if interviewers interview ordinary
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, they can know their true state .
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, having non-professional actors helps
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 producers to show their whole personality and emotions.
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this
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 trend has many benefits, the disadvantages of
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 approach outweigh the advantages , as every duty should be done by
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.
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, actors deliberately study to become performers and work hard to reach professional levels. If ordinary
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 start working on
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, professional performers can lose their jobs and career opportunities. The second drawback is that many
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 develop a desire to be famous , and they can lose their personal jobs to become artists.
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, Everyone should do their own thing , and
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 everything will be in order. In conclusion, the
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 programs that the stars are in aren’t a good idea as
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 can cause losing jobs and more
people
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 become irresponsible, so it’s better if all the work is done by executives.

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task response
Answer the task clearly and show a clear view at the end. Add more real examples and balance good and bad points.
coherence and cohesion
Make a clear plan before writing. Use clear links and put new ideas in new paragraphs. End with a strong conclusion.
idea
The essay shows a view that non actors can show real life.
content
Some examples are used to explain points.
structure
There is an intro, body and conclusion.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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