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many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. do you think is a good thing?

#people #money #weddings
Nowadays, doing a wedding in a grand way has become
one
 of the status parameter. Society has started to judge
one
's richness by the type of wedding
one
 chooses to do. The more grand your wedding is, the more impression you will have on the society.
This
 growing trend of big fat weddings is a great sign that mankind has started to enjoy every moment of their life. As industrialization and commercialization is increasing, human is getting more and more busy in their work which is somewhat resulting in
poor work life balance
Suggestion
a poor work life balance
. With rare occasions of celebration, it is required to celebrate whatever small or big happiness comes in our way. But in my opinion, it is
also
 important to have a complete understanding and planning of
one
's current and future
financials
involving financial matters
financial
 needs before we plan a huge investment in leisure activities
such
 as wedding.
Wedding
Suggestion
A wedding
 is an event where we spend our hard earned money not only on
ourselves but
Accept comma addition
ourselves, but
also
on
Suggestion
for
 others and most of the time it happen that the guests are not that involved in your happiness and they
also
 give bad feedbacks and comment about the food, decor,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 before others.
This
 reminds me of an incident where me along with my other friends were attending a wedding. At
one
 sight there was the bride, the groom, their family was looking so happy and emotional and on the other
side we
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side, we
 saw their few relatives bad mouthing about something they did not like much. We got disappointed to see that your emotions does not equate with the other invitees in the wedding and
hence
, it's better to be considerate about whom you are inviting and how much you are spending.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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