The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and government should stop spending large amount of money on their armed forces . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays should
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giving access to
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them knowledge and skills
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needed in the workplace
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I tend to think that today
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in the first two years
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in my country,
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the third and fourth
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for
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and
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for their future work, and in summer weekends they
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an internship in
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many different companies. On the one hand, in my opinion that
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completely enough for working on the easier places for beginning,
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, they will gain
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yet, and
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entirelly
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quality workers.
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, if
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ready for working after university, we have many companies where
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people can go through
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. In conclusion, so many universities in the world
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enough
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for
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, even after that we have people
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not ready for working, because they did not use all
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which gives them universities
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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. Always restate it in the conclusion as well.
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Develop your points with more examples or details to support your ideas.
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You presented a relevant topic and gave your opinion.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • cybersecurity
  • surveillance
  • defense mechanisms
  • diplomatic relations
  • global organizations
  • United Nations (UN)
  • NATO
  • peace treaties
  • socioeconomic development
  • military expenditure
  • humanitarian outcomes
  • non-violent conflict resolution
  • historical perspective
  • counter-terrorism
  • internal security
  • traditional military expenditure
  • ethical argument
  • allocate funds
  • infrastructure
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