Some people think that children should start primary school as soon as possible,while others believe they should start school after reaching 7 years old.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is well said that children must go to primary

school

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as fast as possible, on the other side others think that children should start

school

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after reaching 7 years old. I strongly believe that I have

different view

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different views

a different view

about the statement and I will provide my opinions about it.

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with, we need to train

children

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children's

child's

child

behaviour before applying

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for

primary

school

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because if the children don't behave as

properly

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proper

as possible I believe

this

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aspect will interrupt children learning process.

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, there is a research conducted by a team consisting of sociology students from Monash University. They said children that were forced to enter

school

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earlier than others have more tendency to ignore

school

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lessons and regulations.

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, we must watch over our

children

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children's

child's

child

behaviour until they

are mature

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mature

enough to go to

school

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. The

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, we don't need to be

hurry we

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hurry, we

can wait until our children are ready to participate in

school

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life because if we persuade them to go

earlier there

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earlier, there

might be a chance where children cannot understand the whole materials at

school

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because their capability to learn is still low and need to be

train

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trained

a lot.

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; there is a case in Indonesia when

this

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child has already graduated from

kindergarden

a preschool for children age 4 to 6 to prepare them for primary school

kindergarten

with low score and low ability to read or even write. His mother wanted to register her son immediately to primary

school

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, because she thought that if her son can finish his education faster than usual he can be magnificently successful in the future. In fact, her son cannot learn and concentrate at

school

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therefore

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he need to postpone his primary

school

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. To conclude, we must be careful before making decision.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

283 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

critical developmental period
foundational skills
learning difficulties
long-term academic outcomes
structured learning environments
emotional and social development
mental health
well-rounded development
natural pace of childhood development
cognitive and personal growth
mature emotionally and socially
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Some people think that children should start primary school as soon as possible,while others believe they should start school after reaching 7 years old.To what extent do you agree or disagree

Include an introduction and conclusion

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

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People feel that educational success is dependent on having a good teacher, others say it depends not the attitude of the student. Discuss both side and state your opinion*

Professional sports person are often idolized by the youth. Some people think that they, therefore, have a responsibility to be role models at all times for children. Do you agree or disagree?