Some people think that children should start primary school as soon as possible,while others believe they should start school after reaching 7 years old.To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is well said that children must go to primary
school
as fast as possible, on the other side others think that children should start
school
after reaching 7 years old. I strongly believe that I have
different view
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different views
a different view
about the statement and I will provide my opinions about it.
To begin
with, we need to train
children
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children's
child's
child
behaviour before applying
to
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for
primary
school
because if the children don't behave as
properly
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proper
as possible I believe
this
aspect will interrupt children learning process.
Moreover
, there is a research conducted by a team consisting of sociology students from Monash University. They said children that were forced to enter
school
earlier than others have more tendency to ignore
school
lessons and regulations.
In addition
, we must watch over our
children
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children's
child's
child
behaviour until they
are mature
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mature
enough to go to
school
. The
next
, we don't need to be
hurry we
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hurry, we
can wait until our children are ready to participate in
school
life because if we persuade them to go
earlier there
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earlier, there
might be a chance where children cannot understand the whole materials at
school
because their capability to learn is still low and need to be
train
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trained
a lot.
For example
; there is a case in Indonesia when
this
child has already graduated from
kindergarden
a preschool for children age 4 to 6 to prepare them for primary school
kindergarten
with low score and low ability to read or even write. His mother wanted to register her son immediately to primary
school
, because she thought that if her son can finish his education faster than usual he can be magnificently successful in the future. In fact, her son cannot learn and concentrate at
school
,
therefore
he need to postpone his primary
school
. To conclude, we must be careful before making decision.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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