Online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, shopping

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online website

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the online website

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of stores has been

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a topic

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of heated debate. While some people argue that online shopping has some detrimental effects

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their economic issues, it can be

useful way

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a useful way

of shopping. I personally believe that people can search effectively what they want to purchase on

online but

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online, but

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drawbacks to

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take

into account. On the one hand, there are some benefits of online shopping.

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, it is a quicker and easier way to shop since people can buy products at home without having go to shop or shopping malls.

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, Amazon and AliExpress are two popular

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websites

that provide a huge number of different products, and customers visit those websites and purchase easily.

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, customers can save

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time

and travelling

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costs

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, online shopping allows people to have a wide range of choices as they can compare different brands and products.

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, buyers can easily compare the shoes of Adidas and Nike, it is difficult to do that at physical stores.

On the other hand

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, online shopping can be negative in several ways. The

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drawback is that customers cannot try products before making a purchase.

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illustrate, a girl cannot try wearing a dress to see if it fits her body.

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, products sold online are less reliable, and the products which people get delivered to their house may have a poorer quality than expected.

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, because online shopping is cheaper and easier, people tend to buy too much, which would lead to a large waste of money. In conclusion,

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online shopping

is faced

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has faced

is facing

a variety of problems

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as unreliable and wasting of money, these problems are not insurmountable, it has

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many positive effects

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as cheaper and a wide range of products.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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300 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

online shopping
shopping in stores
convenience
accessibility
wide variety
comparative pricing
crowds
queues
price comparison
returning and exchanging items
local businesses
personal interaction
sensory experience

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