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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others thinks bicycle is better. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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Although
, it is believed by some people that travelling by
car
 is an ideal
transportation
 in a city, other people think that
bicycle
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the bicycle
 is more suitable. In my opinion, it
is depend
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depends
 on
to
being one more than one
two
kilometers
a metric unit of length equal to 1000 meters (or 0.621371 miles)
kilometres
 that how far people
wants
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want
 to
travel
 and on their age.
Accordingly
, they can choose either
car
 or
bicycle
 to reach their destination. On the one hand,
car
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the car
 is more appropriate because it is very fast and four to five people can
travel
 together at
same time
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the same time
.
Car
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The car
also
 provides other comforts like air conditioning, heater, comfortable sitting, music and extra space to carry luggage. People who
wants
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want
 to
travel
 to another city which is approximately 150 km far.
Car
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The car
A car
 would be the best options because it will take about 2-3 hours.
On the other hand
, bicycles are more suitable for children who wants to ride school daily. It does not cost for fuel so that it will cheaper than
car
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a car
cars
.
Bicycle
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The bicycle
A bicycle
 is very good for
shorter distance
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shorter distances
a shorter distance
 and
moreover
, it is good for maintaining good physical health. Most people prefer to use
bicycle
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bicycles
 for their
transportation
 to
work but
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work, but
 it is only convenient for people whose workplace is not too far.
Furthermore
, using
bicycle
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a bicycle
 is
also
 very good for the environment because it causes no pollution in the air.
Finally
, in my view, both options are mandatory to use for travelling. For adult and older
people
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person's
peoples'
car
 will be
best option whereas
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the best option, whereas
the best option whereas
 for children and young generation
bicycle
 will be perfect. Older people and Adult have to
travel
 with their family and kids, so that
car
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the car
 gets more priority than other type of
transportation
, whereas kids only have to
travel
 to garden and school, so for shorter distance
bicycle
 is better and safer. In conclusion, there are different types of
transportation
 are
available but
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available, but
 using
car
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a car
the car
cars
 and or
bicycle
 will be depend on the distance to
travel
 and person who is driving.

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