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international travel has many advantages to both travelers and the country visited you think the rental chairs always disadvantages?

#travel #travelers #country #chairs
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Tourism
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 is one of the thumb industries that brings countries great benefits.
However
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, being parallel to advantages is its drawbacks.
This
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 essay will point out some good and bad facets of
tourism
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 and express my opinion that
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 has more advantages than disadvantages. To start with,
tourism
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 is beneficial for both
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 and the
country
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 visited. With reference to
travelers
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
,
tourism
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is exhorts
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is exhorting
exhorts
has exhorted
is exhorted
 them to broaden their knowledge and gain more experiences. It is
tourism
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 that help people know more about various countries, people,
cuisin
the practice or manner of preparing food or the food so prepared
cuisine
, customs,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 in the realest way. What's more,
tourism
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 can
also
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 help
country
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visited earn
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visited, earn
 an enormous amount of income.
Travelers
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Travellers
 around the world are the source of employment. The evidences are many jobs relating to
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 are created, many workers have jobs, transportation services and trading with foreign tourists are invested in to
develop
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developers
 taking part in the advancement of
holistic economy
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the holistic economy country
country
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. Simultaneously,
tourism
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also
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 has its negative aspects. Two of them are environmental destruction in visited
country
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 and robbery in which the patients are the tourists. The overload in
hords
a vast multitude
hordes
hoards
 of tourists causes a general status of wasting garbage seriously. Under most circumstances, many tourist attractions have to suffer from trash, used bottles, nylon bags,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 which leads to many disturbing problems.
Besides
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, many tourists can be the patients of robbery when bringing a lot of valuables and precious belongings during the tour. To include, I think
tourism
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, like everything, has its two
opposit
being directly across from each other; facing
opposite
 sides. But I still have
preference
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preferred
 to support it on account of its advantages because obviously the benefits of outweigh the downsides. The thing is we need to know how to make use of it and manage to restrict its negative effects.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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