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Many people believe that social networking sites(such as Facebook)have had a huge impact on both the individuals and society? To what extent do you agree?

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Social networking services are online platforms for people to build their social networks or a following of other people who share same personal interests.
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, some people believe that these social media platforms have had a pessimistic
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 on both humans and societies. Whereas, I believe that its benefits outweigh its disadvantages.
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 with, the
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 that social media has had on each individual is a big advantage.
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, people from different culture, countries are brought together with social media sites
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 as Facebook. Earlier, when there was no internet and social networking platforms people have had rare chances to meet someone from a different culture and had a rare opportunity to communicate with them.
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, Facebooks gives us the advantage to form online groups and gives us the chance to connect and communicate with people who share similar interests.
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, the
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 which Facebook and other social networking sites have had on the local communities can only be seen in a negative way. Because, people prefer involving online with others, rather than taking part in their local communities.
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, these days people do not have strong relationships with each other.
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, so cities are becoming disjointed and fragmented as more and more people socializing online,
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 of doing it in-person. To conclude,
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 social networking sites have brought people from different countries together, but it has not the similar
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 on the local communities and societies.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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