The continued rise in the world population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

It is a universally acknowledged fact that there is a drastic increase in the
population
of
world
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the world
. Below deliberation will
delves
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delve
into some of the reasons behind
this
trend. I concur with people who argue that in
this
contemporary era, the problem of overpopulation is
the biggy
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the biggest
the bigger
threat to mankind. To commence with the causes, a significant one is that there is a decline in the death rate of human being. The reason being people nowadays tend to enjoy their life and have a better standard of living which leads to stress free life, eventually a longer life span. To illustrate, people are more health conscious as compared to earlier days. Better medical facilities are provided by
authorities
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the authorities
which will reduce the danger of people dying with fatal diseases. Another crucial reason for
this
rise in
population
is that infant mortality rates have dropped due to good education provided to
womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
and they are very well aware of the fertility treatments and can overcome pregnancy related problems with proper guidance from
gynacologist
a specialist in gynecology
gynaecologist
. I believe
this
pressing issue is the greatest phenomenon faced by human beings. As overpopulation leads to another problem of unemployment in the developing and under developed nations. More the count of people more people
needs
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need
to look for jobs and for a stagnated
economy generating
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economy, generating
jobs for the youth will become a major concern. Another crucial outcome
from
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of
this
issue can be the shortage of resources, specifically food and water. Numerous studies
are being performed
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have been performed
which shows that poor people in
third
world nations are unable to earn their one time meal for a day. Due to lack of basic necessities many people suffer from malnutrition. In conclusion, Due to decrease in
death rate
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the death rate
and mortality rate of
new borns
recently born
newborns
,
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,
there is
a
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an
increase in count of
population
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the population
,
however
there is an urgent need to monitor and control
this
rise
.
Accept space
.
As
population
is increasing
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increases
with alarming rates, more burning issues like unemployment and scarcity of resources become a significant threat to humanity

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