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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is sometimes argued that tourists from foreign countries should pay more than local residents to visit important sites and monuments. While I believe there are several reasons why
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 might be true, I would argue that foreign and local visitors should be charged equally.
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 with, there are some reasons why visitors from overseas should pay more.
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, cultural and historical attractions often depend on state subsidies to keep them going, which means that the local population already pays money to these sites through the tax system.
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, the locals should be given priority over foreign travellers by charging them less.
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, some people might say that because foreign tourists are the main reason for the building of these attractions, they should pay higher admission fees to these sites.
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, I would argue that there should be no discrimination between the fees that foreign tourists and local people have to pay to visit cultural and historical sites.
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 of all, foreign tourists contribute to the economy of the host country by spending their money on a wide range of goods and services
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 as food, souvenirs, accommodation and travel.
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, if travellers realised that they would have to pay more to visit historical and cultural attractions in a particular nation, they would perhaps decide not to go to that country on holidays.
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, the number of tourists would remarkably reduce and a country could risk losing money for the maintenance of these important buildings. In conclusion, while I understand why many people might think overseas tourists should be charged more than local residents, I believe it is better to treat them equally and every effort should be made to attract tourists all over the world.
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