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Some argue that organic food is better for health and the environment, while others believe it is just a marketing trend. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
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 believe that organic
food
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 is healthier and better for the environment,
while
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 others argue that it is only a marketing trend used to increase sales.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and explain why I think organic
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 is truly beneficial. On the one hand, many
people
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 support organic
food
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 because it is grown without artificial chemicals
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 as pesticides and fertilisers. These chemicals can sometimes remain on fruits and vegetables, which may affect
people
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’s health in the long term. Organic farming avoids these substances, so consumers feel safer when eating
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 products.
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, organic
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 is not genetically modified, and
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 gives
people
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 the impression that it is more natural. These farming practices
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 help the soil stay healthy and protect insects and animals that live in the environment. Because of
this
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, organic
food
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 is seen as a better choice for both humans and nature.
On the other hand
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, some believe that organic
food
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 has become more of a business strategy than a real health benefit. Many companies use the word “organic” to attract buyers, even when the difference between organic and regular
food
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 is not always clear.
As a result
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, organic products often cost much more, and not everyone can afford them. Some
people
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 feel that the high prices are not justified and that consumers are paying mainly for the label rather than for real quality. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 think organic
food
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 is just a marketing trend, I believe it has real advantages. It is grown in a way that protects both human health and the environment. Even if the price is higher, the long-term benefits make organic
food
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 a valuable choice for many
people
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.

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task response
The essay answers the question and gives both sides plus your view at the end. Keep this balance and make your view a clear line in the end.
coherence
Make the flow of ideas better. The paragraphs have one main idea each. Use a few more link words to show how one idea leads to the next.
strength
Clear view on both sides and your own view at the end.
strength
Introduction and conclusion are present and clear.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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