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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that tourists from overseas must pay more than the local people to visit important cultural and historical attractions. I strongly agree that foreigners should pay more compare to local people due to some reasons.
Firstly
, with tourists have
to
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has
pay more for the attractions, it can help to minimize the number of visitors, especially the tourists, by all mean, it can prevent the attractions from being too crowded and keep the places clean. Many tourists are not responsible for what they did.
For example
, littering as they wish and damage the property.
This
 kind of problem will make the
place
 dirty and reduce visitors’ interest to come.
Secondly
, the income from the tourists which are really high might be used to maintain the
place
 regularly by the government. By maintaining the
place
, it may helps the
place
 to stay in a good condition. Historical attractions and other monuments need some sort of preservation and special care to keep it in a good condition to long
last
. Th
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lasting
e government may give a special attention to the most popular attractions.
For instance
, when it maintained monthly it will give a fresh look.
Plac
e whi
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A place
The place
ch is neat and beautiful can attract people’s attention to come. To conclude, applying higher fee at cultural and historical attractions for tourists is required to avoid some unwanted problem
such
 as the cleanliness of the places, but it should be controlled and take care of the
place
 to draw people’s attention from all over the world.
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