Longer life spans and improvements in the health of older people suggest that people over the age of sixty-five can continue to live full and active lives. In what ways can society benefit from the contribution that older people can make?

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In today’s new era of technology and science people possess at their disposal, knowledge, and services that most people would consider impossible a couple of centuries back. The world is changing at an alarming pace, not always for the better, and with it so are all the living beings that inhabit it, which includes us.
Besides
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the clear and always evident technological advancement, there have
also
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been verified some clear improvements when it comes to general health. Whether we are referring to the cautions that the average person has on a daily basis, or if we are discussing the great medical and pharmaceutical advances. Since, the cures to diseases that have been
labeled
bearing or marked with a label or tag
labelled
as
untreatable
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in the past have never been closer, or already found, and doctors have never had
such
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useful
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Useful
and sophisticated equipment as they have now.
On the other hand
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, now that
human species
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the human species
has
such
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an advanced ability to heal and to cure, it seems almost impossible to imagine a downside to
this
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situation.
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, one can be easily found if we take in consideration all the costs associated
in
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with
the treatments that are mostly subsidized by the government. And, the people that most frequently use these services are the elderly, who
are in most cases retired
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is in most cases retired
are in most cases retired
living from a pension
payed
marked by the reception of pay
paid
by the state, and spending most of it in hospitals and pharmacies taking care of themselves.
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, causing a huge cost
for
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to
the
tax payers
someone who pays taxes
taxpayers
in
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In
two different ways. To conclude, in my opinion, the people that are over sixty-five years old in order to help fight
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this
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situation should still contribute in some way to the society.
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, a doctor at the age of 75, does not possess the energy to continue to work full-time at a hospital.
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, it does not mean that he
can not
can not
cannot
teach
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
new students at
an
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a
University, where he could easily work as a professor, or as an assistant professor, do some light work at a health facility like taking blood samples, or measuring the levels of
glycemia
relating to the effect of different foods on blood sugar levels
glycemic
, and even do an occasional consultation.
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, I believe that if equivalent measures would be put to use in all professional fields, society could experience a huge contribute from people over the age of sixty-five.

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