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Today more and more old cities are being rebuilt and redesigned in order to be modernized. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

#cities #trend
Everything in
this
 world is mortal, life runs its own cycle. Everything in
this
 world is not forever, they have their
time
 to live after birth and gradually converted to dust when
there
of them or themselves
their
 lifespan ends. Old cities are modernized to
new city
Suggestion
a new city
 due to our new lifestyle, habit and thought process. If you are talking about advantage,
firstly
, our new modernized city gives us necessary amenities which are very much necessary for our modern life.
Secondly employment
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Secondly, employment
, investor / big companies are investing
money which
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money, which
 intern opens the door for employment. Another advantage is
better life style
Suggestion
a better life style
 which is everybody dream off. Modern equipment, technique brings the better lifestyle. Though modernization brings the good fortune to
us but
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us, but
 it
actually make
Suggestion
actually makes
has actually made
 us separate. Either it takes our personal
time
 or it will make us self-oriented. People are losing good quality, family
time due
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time, due
 to modernization. We are becoming the machine in the modernized city as we are only thinking of our self. Each generation leads their own path, which is present now will be past tomorrow. As the
time
 goes
by new
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by, new
 concept will come, new methodologies will
established
Suggestion
establish
, we cannot deny it. We have to find our happiness, mental desire in
this
 modern society.

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