The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
This
rendered graph represents how
much
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many
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enquiries
Tourist
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the Tourist
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Information office obtained in a city in 2011 within
six-months
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six months
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by
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apply
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in person
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in-person
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,
letter
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via letter
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or email, and
telephone
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by telephone
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.
Overall
,
face to face
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face-to-face
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and
enquiries
by letter or email showed an inclination from
January
to
June
.
Whereas
, telephone
enquiries
had not
much
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surprising feedback from customers Regarding information gathered by meeting in
January
, it was about 400 and a month later, numbers surged up by 200.
However
, after 2 months of period, figures reached to a peak of 1600 and in
June
it was over 1800.
Further
,
enquiries
by letter or electronic mail, there was a plunge between
January
and February from about 900 to 800, respectively.
Afterward
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, in March the number goes to 1000 and had been unchanged until April,
thus
by
June
there was a dramatic increase of 1600.
Moreover
, telephone
enquiries
did not show an interesting pattern with a continuous decline from 800 (
January
) to less than 400 (
June
).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, january, june with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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