The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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rendered graph represents how

much

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many

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enquiries

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Tourist

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the Tourist

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Information office obtained in a city in 2011 within

six-months

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six months

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apply

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in person

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in-person

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letter

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via letter

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or email, and

telephone

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by telephone

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face to face

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and

enquiries

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by letter or email showed an inclination from

January

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June

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Whereas

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, telephone

enquiries

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had not

much

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surprising feedback from customers Regarding information gathered by meeting in

January

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, it was about 400 and a month later, numbers surged up by 200.

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, after 2 months of period, figures reached to a peak of 1600 and in

June

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it was over 1800.

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enquiries

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by letter or electronic mail, there was a plunge between

January

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and February from about 900 to 800, respectively.

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, in March the number goes to 1000 and had been unchanged until April,

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June

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there was a dramatic increase of 1600.

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, telephone

enquiries

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did not show an interesting pattern with a continuous decline from 800 (

January

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) to less than 400 (

June

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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, january, june with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

159 words

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Some people think painting and drawings are important as other subjects. They should be compulsory in high school education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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