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In many cities, many people are living in large apartment blocks. Does this accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages?

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There has been quite an obvious discussion around the topic of
apartment
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blocks
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While
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 some
people
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 believe that a flat has
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 effect
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people
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 who live in
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 place, I would argue that large
apartment
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 buildings are more helpful for
people
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’s
lifestyles
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 in
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 day. I will explain my reasons in
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 essay. There is no doubt that living in an
apartment
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 block can have a negative impact on
people
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 who prefer more living space.
This
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 is because some
people
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 would like to have more space for their families and outside areas for their
lifestyles
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, in Thailand, some families who have
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 than 3
people
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 prefer to have houses more than flats because they would like to have more space for their children.
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, some families have outside areas for their garden.
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, an
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 block can not provide
people
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 do several activities.
However
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, it is worth pointing out that large
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blocks
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 and flats have many advantages for
people
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’s
lifestyles
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 in
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 day.
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 is based on the fact that apartments are built close to the city centre and can be close to the residents’ work, shopping centre and transportation which can benefit
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their
lifestyles
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, Singapore has many
apartment
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blocks
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 for residents who would like to live near their workplace which can save them time.
This
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 is the reason why
people
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 prefer to live in flats more than a house.
Consequently
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,
apartment
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blocks
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 can increase convenience for
people
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 who live in these facilities. In conclusion, we can observe that residents can be convenient
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 living in large
apartment
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 buildings.
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, I firmly believe that living in
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 buildings has more advantages than downsides.

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specific examples
Strengthen your argument with more varied and specific examples to illustrate your points about both the advantages and disadvantages of living in apartment blocks.
cohesion
To improve coherence, consider linking your ideas and paragraphs more smoothly by using a wider range of linking words and phrases.
balance argument
For an even stronger essay, provide a more balanced discussion by exploring the disadvantages in greater depth to match the detail given to the advantages.
introduction
Good use of an introductory statement to clearly state your opinion on the topic.
conclusion
Effective conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint and reinforces your argument.
examples
Relevant examples given to support your points, particularly with the mention of Singapore which illustrates the convenience of apartment living.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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