2.Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss.

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is is

have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

argued that lavish celebrations and parties are important and people should spend

money

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on them while

other

plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned

others

are against

this

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notion. In my

opinion it

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opinion, it

is reasonable to celebrate important days while having a limited budget.

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with many

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with, many

people

spend

Suggestion

spends

handful on important celebrations and functions to make them memorable. There are many achievements and landmarks in people’s lives that can only be experienced once, which is an important reason to celebrate those days.

For instance

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, most people graduate only once in their lifetime from university,

thus

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, holding a nice dinner for family and friends to celebrate

this

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important achievement is a reasonable expenditure. These moments are not only special for an individual, but

also

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they help the local community as they create jobs

such

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as catering, party planners, and so on.

Therefore

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, spending

money

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on a memorable day gives

sentimental value

Suggestion

the sentimental value

of a person’s achievements and helps

circulates

Suggestion

circulate

money

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into

economy

Suggestion

the economy

On the contrary

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, spending large-sum

money

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on celebrations can be saved for rainy days. Many couples spend huge funds on their weddings to mark their

union which

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union, which

can be saved for important matters like retirement, and mortgage. According to a research, many newly weds went under debt or verge of bankruptcy soon after their wedding ceremony due to limitless expenditure.

This

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can easily be avoided by having

limited budget

Suggestion

a limited budget

and holding a humble event.

Hence

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instead

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of spending

money

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on celebrations, the hard earn

money

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can be put away for tough times ahead. In conclusion, holding celebration events are important since they give meaning to a person’s life and

also

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puts

money

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into community creating jobs.

However

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, it is important to have a limited budget for unforeseen expenditure.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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283 words

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2.Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss.

Your opinion

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.