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1.Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. Discuss

It has been argued that to achieve success in life is to get an expensive degree while others believe one can only succeed with hands on experience at work
instead
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 of tertiary
education
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. In my opinion depending on occupation each path can be lead to prosperous careers.
To begin
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 with tertiary
education
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 not only expands student’s knowledge in a particular
department but
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department, but
also
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 introduces them to various other fields which many students are unaware of that have equally lucrative earnings. According to a research, 70% of students changed their majors after
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first year
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the first year
 of attending
university
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 after becoming aware of other higher earning programs. Since students are able to make
conscious decision
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conscious decisions
a conscious decision
the conscious decision
 after their
education
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, they can able to secure a high paid job while having successful careers.
Thus
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,
university
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education
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 is important for
number
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a number
the number
 of professions and exposure to unpopular educational areas. To the contrary, not every job description requires expensive
university
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education
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. Vocational training schools which are much shorter and cheaper than universities, have some programs where earnings are significantly higher as oppose to someone with a degree, a great example for
this
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 would be carpenters.Mechanics, and plumbing, are some of the examples where hands on experience is more valuable as opposed to book knowledge.
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, it is reasonable to believe that a person can reach
same level
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the same level
 of achievement without higher
education
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 as someone with a degree. In conclusion, I believe that one must be confident in their field of choice before attending
university
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 due to costly
education
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. Students must be exposed to various career choices in high school so they can make an informed decision for their future professional life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • specialized expertise
  • on-the-job training
  • work experience
  • financial independence
  • career growth
  • hands-on experience
  • balanced perspective
  • internships
  • part-time work
  • academic learning
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • personal circumstances
  • financial constraints
  • career goals
  • individual aptitudes
  • well-paying careers
  • satisfying careers
  • specialized training
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