At present time , the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages.

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Presently

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Many countries in the world are populated with

large number

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a large number

of adults than elderly people.Each

generation

have

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has

their own specific roles and

responsibilties

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibilities

. I will be focussing on

advantages

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the advantages

of having both young and older

generation

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generations

this

essay. Young people are considered as powerhouse of a country.They have unlimited stock of fresh ideas

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energy and enthusiasm. They are always ready to take

challanges

take exception to

challenges

and make the competition

tough

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tougher

in today

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s time.So, having more of a youth in a country is like having

full supply

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a full supply

resource

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resources

the resource

Moreover

, it is easy to modify the fresh talents as required. They are all fresh blossoms and can bring

required changes

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the required changes

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with

them easily as required of time. Young

generation

acquire

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acquires

new skills, languages

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expertise very quickly and adopt them. It is said

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Health is wealth.As

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youth is considered healthier and can work for long hours.

young

(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth

Young

people

can be indulge

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can indulge

more of outdoor activites

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more outdoor activities

more of outdoor activities

.The progress and position of sports of a country

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all depend on young people. They all have healthy mindset and body to contribute to progress of

nation

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the nation

nations

a nation

However

, life is incomplete

with out

in absence of

without

supportive experienced

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supportive, experienced

hand beside us. So

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elders are with blast of experience

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experts in their professions.

For instance

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we always wanted to visit an experience doctor

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This

is all because they have spent their whole life

in to

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into

it and are good to understand

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Above all

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each and every

generation

has its own place.All things considered, it is reasonable to say

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advantages of young adults outweighs the older people.As older people have contributed their complete life

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now their body

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spirit

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energy

are

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all not enough for the development of a nation

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For

this

we need more of young youth.

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At present time , the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages.

Fully explain your ideas

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