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Some people say the main way to happy in life is to have a lot of money .How having a lot of money make people happy ?what others things ald

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A certain number of people believe that the richest person is the happiest one, whereas others hold a view, that there are
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 others factors which can make people happy. In my opinion, having a good family and friends, a good environment at work place are more important aspects than it. It is irrefutable, that
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 can easily fulfil all the basics as well as extravagance needs of a person
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 as clothes, big bungalow and long car.
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affluent people can send their children to the well reputed schools, which would help them to accelerate the career and have more opportunities in the future.
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, they can do the treatment of the diseases from the renowned hospitals.
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, an Indian cricket team player "Yuvraj Singh" did the treatment of his cancer, even it was in its
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 stage because he had lots of
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.
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, if people are having a good family,
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 no other thing in the world can give them happiness of
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 kind.In fact, they do not easily become the victim of the ailments.
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, a survey was conducted by an agency in, which they found that 70% of people who were suffering from the depression were belonged to the rich class. If people have less amount of cash but, they have a good surroundings as well as the work of their choice at the offices,
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 it makes them more ecstatic.Many people today are earning an enormous amount of salary, but they are not cheerful with the task they are doing in their offices.
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 employees get a higher wages
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but they are not satisfied with the job in which they are engaged in their offices.
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 why they want to go to the private sector. To conclude, while it is undeniable that
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 can easily satisfy all the luxury requirements, in order to happy others factors
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 as family and friends, if a person does not have these
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 is of no use for him.
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