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Some people say that prison sentences should be prolonged to reduce crimes. Others say that there are alternative ways to reduce crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

#people #prison #sentences #crimes #alternative
The argument about
prison
sentences
Suggestion
sentence
duration
 happen in every country, different point of views some parties support prolonging sentences and
on the other hand
 others suggest reduces sentences.
Neverlethess
, crime will happen due to drugs, money and other reasons.I believe
its
it is
it's
 unfair to reduce the
prison
sentences
Suggestion
sentence
duration
.
First
 of all,
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 who get involved in crimes should be punished for a long time since other people are getting hurt and in some cases are getting killed.Even though, some of the prisoners learn and get some education in the
prisons but
Accept comma addition
prisons, but
 they still deserve to get the full sentence
duration
.
Lebanese goverment
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The Lebanese government
Lebanese government
for
example every
Accept comma addition
example, every
 4 years they will release prisoners who are not involved in terrorist
activites
any specific behavior
activities
activists
 and
thus
 statistics shows that 12 percent of these prisoners will come back
for
Suggestion
to
 same or different reason. All in all,
this
 proves that
prison
 sentences shouldn't be prolonged.
Secondly
, victims and their families experience mental issues due to what they got through.The parties that support reducing the
senctences
Suggestion
sentence
sentences
duration
 have to respect the
victims
Suggestion
victim's
victims'
 feelings.In fact, some of the victims families are having
hard time
Suggestion
a hard time
 continuing their
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life's
life
 because they lost the faith in life.
Finally
, judges will be able to decide if
prison
 sentences should be
prologned
relatively long in duration; tediously protracted
prolonged
 to reduce crimes.
Although
 based on what I mentioned in
this
 essay show that
its
it is
it's
 not effective to reduce the
duration
 and it won't reduce crimes.I insist on my
opnion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
 that criminals deserve the punishment and
also
 victims should be respected.
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