The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the
amount
of
money
of two countries,
France
and the UK spent on five products, namely:
cars
, computers, books,
perfume
and
cameras
in 2010, and
it
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apply
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measured
by
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in
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pounds
sterling.
Overall
, it
clears
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is clears
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that both nation
group
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groups
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tend to buy
cars
with the highest using
money
. In the UK,
perfume
is the
kind
of
goods
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good
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with the
amount
of spending
money
with
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apply
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the lowest;
however
,
cameras
were the
kind
of
goods
with the
amount
of using
money
at least in
France
. The
amounts
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amount
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of
money
spent
cars
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on cars
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in
France
were
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was
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higher than
computers
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on computers
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by 25,000
pounds
sterling. Total spending on books,
perfume
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and perfume
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in
France
was 300,000
pounds
,
200,000
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and 200,000
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pounds
respectively.
Cameras
were the
kind
of
goods
with the lowest expenditure was 150,000
pounds
sterling. The
amount
of
money
spent
perfume
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on perfume
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was the lowest during the given period diagram under 150,000
pounds
sterling. Computers and
cameras
were about the same in the amounts of using
money
, with the amounts of spending
cameras
higher
just
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by just
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10,000
pounds
sterling.
Cars
were
kind
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the kind
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of
goods
with the highest expenditure
was
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apply
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455,000
pounds
sterling, compared to approximately 405,000
pounds
sterling
of
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for
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books.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, france, cars, perfume, cameras, pounds, kind, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.

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