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In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that University education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #people #education
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In recent years, there are two different opinions, one of which is that every
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 should offer for all prospective students to free of charge of
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 cost, and the other of which is that all students have to pay for studying their major in the university.
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, I personally believe that attending to the
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 without any
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fee
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 makes all students satisfying. On the one hand, it is partly true that why some thinkers argue that students have to charge their
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fee
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 into the educational institutions.
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, every
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 without earning from their student results in undermining the schools' quality of curriculums. Not only universities but
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 professors cannot earn sufficient profits from their undergraduates so that colleges cannot provide their students with wider study classrooms and diverse useful facilities, and professors might not be responsible for their duty.
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, I am firmly of the opinion that eliminating
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 a custom which is paying an amount of money to the
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 has an efficacious impacts on the society. In the
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 place, it is needless to say that all prospective students do not need to consider their financial condition, leading to get equal opportunity to educate between poor and rich people.
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, it cannot help saying with respect to parents' perspective. A lot of parents do not need to worry about the money issue. According to a recent survey, parents cost of their children's colleges payment around 45,000$ to 50,000$ a year. It makes numerous parents work for a long period and give up on spending their leisure time. In conclusion, it is still a debatable issue whether or not, all colleges should receive amounts of
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fee
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 from their students.
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, I am convinced that to get rid of all admission
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 and
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 of the universities has a lot of various benefits to both students and their family.
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