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Companies should provide sport and social facilities for the local community. To what extend do you agree?

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There is a notion that businesses should offer sport and social facilities for surrounding residents. I totally agree with
this
 statement for
number
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a number
 of reasons below.
First
, in order to operate efficiently, companies have to use local resources
such
 as human, natural resources.
Therefore
, returning the local
inhabitants some
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inhabitants, some
 benefits is a done thing.
For instance
, businesses can build a nearby
park which
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park, which
 is an ideal place for all ages to have some physical activities: kids can ride their bike or roller-skate, elder people can go for a walk or run.
Besides
, they not only satisfy physical
health but
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health, but
also
 mental health by creating some other areas like a café where people can easily get a drink or snack, hang out with friends.
Second
, if businesses give local community some benefits as mentioned above, they are likely to get the support back. Surrounding residents might use the given facilities, in which they will spend time, money or joins the activities, events as a way to encourage companies. That may help boost/contribute to
local economy
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the local economy
local economies
.
However
, if local people do not use those services,
this
 might harm the economy rather than the benefits they may bring. For the purpose of creating some values to dwellers, companies have to spend amount of time, money and effort, which
maybe
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may be
 a waste
instead
 of investments in other projects.
Although
,
this
 circumstance rarely happens, surrounding residents tend to enjoy the offered facilities and strongly support businesses. In conclusion, companies get various benefits from local communities.
Therefore
, they should bring some values in turn for residential interests in terms of physical and mental health.
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