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Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illnesses and diseases and not enough on health education and prevention. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is no doubt that these days
health
 education is being an important need in various societies,
however
, the question: Are governments spending enough on
health
awareness
 among citizens? Is being a controversial issue nowadays.In
this
 essay I am going to examine
this
 phenomenon from both viewpoints, while I tend to believe that public
health
awareness
 has to get more attention from governments as what is happening now with Coronavirus. On one side of the argument, there are people who argue that countries are spending on treating illnesses and
this
 is beneficial as long as they can treat diseases and they are willing to produce vaccinations whenever is needed.
Furthermore
, having highly standard hospitals and
health
 care institutions to handle the biggest number of sick people is better than spending money on advertisements on
health
 preventing from an unknown illnesses.
For instance
, in 2010 in China there was a
spread
 of a new disease which is SARS,
however
, it costs the country a lot to handle it.They could do
this
 because of their strong infrastructure in healthcare and hospitals.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to consider it with the opposing case which is preventing the disease before it spreads and requires a huge budget to put it under control.One good illustration here is what happened in China in 2019.There was a
spread
 of a new illness which is Coronavirus-Covid19.The fast
spread
 was because of the lack of
awareness
 among people.
In addition
, they were eating bats and lizards and that was one of the main reasons, so if the government put more effort on spreading
awareness
, they could avoid the millions spent on treating patients. In conclusion, as we have seen there is no easy answer, but I think countries have to take a lesson from what happened in China and be more attent
ion to
Suggestion
more attentive
spread
health
 education and prevention.
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