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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the government rather than private company. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In recent years, the question of whether the public sector should exclusively perform the medical study without the participation of the private sector has been receiving a great deal of public attention.
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 the role of government is irreplaceable, private corporations should get involved in researching. There is a whole host of reasons why the governmental bodies should in charge of carrying out scientific study, among which the primary one is that if products
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 as a cure for infectious disease are produced by the state, they will gain more credibility. For profit-oriented enterprises usually take part in these projects with an aim to make money, they may have a tendency to distort research results for the sake of profit.
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, recently, a pharmaceutical company in Vietnam had faked their effectiveness to furnish the national immunization program for children with low-quality vaccines, which increase the risk of being vulnerable to sickness in children. Having said that,
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, private sectors play a vitally important role in shouldering the responsibility to conduct scientific studies. By dedicating valuable monetary resources, enterprises can not only help ease the financial burden of the state, but
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 achieve greater scientific achievement quicker and more efficiently, compared to innovations funded by limited budget of the governmental bodies. In fact, SpaceX takes a leading portrayal in space tourism when it launched the
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 privately funded rocket into orbit, which created a resounding success and a great dedication to humanity, while the government has more money to invest in another domain and develop social welfare. In conclusion, both public sectors and profit-making organization plays equally indispensable part in scientific research.

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