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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit.

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The argument is about some people feel that the
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 of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments and others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to
design
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 it as they see fit. They both advantages and disadvantages. There are so many reasons in the following paragraphs. It needs to discuss more deeply. We should discuss the advantage
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. The advantage of the newly constructed building in big cities be controlled by governments, is it will fit in the whole city. If it has a reasonable
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. Some people from another area will feel amazing and it makes the city have a symbolic style. If it has an excellent town and country planner, he can
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 it more fit in other buildings. Some buildings from several hundred years ago are designed by the government,
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 as a famous painter or architect to
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 the church. The advantage of who finances the construction of a building should be free to
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 it as they see fit. It may be appearing a better building than other buildings. Most of the famous building nowadays is a
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 by an individual.
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, the disadvantage of the buildings controlled by governments, is it may make the whole city more boring and not any feeling of freshness. The disadvantage of those who finance the construction of a building has the right free to
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 may make have not any special. Even provoked antipathy. To sum up, we still discuss it again.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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