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Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems.

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It is true that the issues related to the environmental pollution have become one of the most controversial issues nowadays, and every nation is wondering about how to tackle the problem. In my opinion, both government and people have to contribute to solve these problems or at least make it less menace. On one hand, everyone bears a greater duty to protect our
environment
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 with, parents at home and teachers at school should teach the
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 generation about how to cause less harm to our
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 and how to take care of our mother Earth. Through teaching the children about recycling and reducing waste, both parents and teachers can contribute a lot.
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, people can reduce the gas emissions by using public transports rather than personal cars and can choose to walk short distances or to their workplaces.
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, by using fewer packages and less plastic and papers, they will reduce a massive threat to the
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, governments should take more efforts to reduce the pollution.
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, by making public transport more convenient to encourage more people to use them,
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 will save more money and energy.
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, through the media and campaign, many people can learn more about the importance of the
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, in the UK there is a campaign called make Britain tidy and
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 campaign encourages people to contribute more to keep the
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 clean.
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, governments should introduce laws to limit the deforestation in many countries around the world, to ensure that there are enough green forests. To conclude, there are many ways in which we can address the issue of environmental pollution, and both individual and government have their own responsibility for
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