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You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city Write a letter of application to the tourism office In the letter give your reasons for wanting the job explain why

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my enthusiasm for the weekend guide vacancy advertised by your tourist office. As a long-time resident of our beautiful city, I am passionate about sharing the rich history, culture and hidden points around
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our town with visitors. I believe
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 I am well suited to
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 my excellent communication skills, friendly behaviour and wide-ranging local knowledge.
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guiding tours through participation in community events and volunteering with historical societies. I am certain that my enthusiasm for our city, combined with my ability to interact and communicate with people from different backgrounds, will make me a valued member of your team. I look forward to the chance
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 my knowledge to all new tourists who will visit our beautiful city. Thank you for reading
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coherence
Try to ensure that each paragraph has a single clear focus, maintaining a logical progression throughout the letter.
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Proofread for minor inaccuracies (e.g. 'hidden points around of our town') to enhance clarity and readability.
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The greeting and closing are appropriate and courteous.
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The letter provides a clear and complete response to the task, addressing relevant points.
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The tone is polite and suitably formal for a job application.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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