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do you agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money?

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Every year a list of celebrities whose highest paid is published. Some stars are paid hundreds of millions of dollars every year. Some
people
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People
 think they deserve
this
 money for their talent and hard work. I strongly disagree. I do not believe anyone should have
such
excessive
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Excessive
 amounts of money. In
this
 essay I will explain the reasons
for
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For
 my view. Famous personalities
such
 as actor
,
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,
 singer or athletes earn insane amounts of money. In fact, celebrities are among the highest paid professionals all over
world
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the world
. Doctor, engineer or teacher. They are all doing the most important jobs in life,
however they
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however, they
 can get a monthly salary of half of the celebrities making in a day. Maybe their popularity may be worse than the other, but they deserve to better treatment than what they do. Many hospitals or schools have shabby facility is a prime example, where people need
more currency
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more current
 to grow,
instead
 of sending them too much cash, get it to charity.
On the other hand
, to achieve the stage of an icon of a country, the entertainers have passed a very difficult and long path which is not achievable for many entertainers. Only few can get that stage and they have high demand
to
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for
 his/her followers. To keep
this
 stage, they have to maintain their quality of work and at the same time social status. For
this
 reason, they need a high salary.
For example
, some days ago a concert was
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 organized in a stadium and all tickets were
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 sold out.
That is
 mean there were more than ten thousand
peoples
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people
 in that concert, so the entertainer of that concert could claim a high salary. In conclusion, we should pay worthy wages for those who are needed for society because the amount will reflect your real capacity.
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