do you agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money?

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Every year a list of celebrities whose highest paid is published. Some stars are paid hundreds of millions of dollars every year. Some
people
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People
think they deserve
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money for their talent and hard work. I strongly disagree. I do not believe anyone should have
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excessive
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Excessive
amounts of money. In
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essay I will explain the reasons
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For
my view. Famous personalities
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as actor
,
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singer or athletes earn insane amounts of money. In fact, celebrities are among the highest paid professionals all over
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the world
. Doctor, engineer or teacher. They are all doing the most important jobs in life,
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however they
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however, they
can get a monthly salary of half of the celebrities making in a day. Maybe their popularity may be worse than the other, but they deserve to better treatment than what they do. Many hospitals or schools have shabby facility is a prime example, where people need
more currency
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more current
to grow,
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of sending them too much cash, get it to charity.
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, to achieve the stage of an icon of a country, the entertainers have passed a very difficult and long path which is not achievable for many entertainers. Only few can get that stage and they have high demand
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for
his/her followers. To keep
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stage, they have to maintain their quality of work and at the same time social status. For
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reason, they need a high salary.
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, some days ago a concert was
been
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being
organized in a stadium and all tickets were
been
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being
sold out.
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mean there were more than ten thousand
peoples
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people
in that concert, so the entertainer of that concert could claim a high salary. In conclusion, we should pay worthy wages for those who are needed for society because the amount will reflect your real capacity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lucrative
  • revenue
  • sponsorships
  • merchandise
  • career longevity
  • market demand
  • economic contribution
  • role models
  • influence
  • entertainment industry
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