In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

United States is one of the most developed and biggest countries in the world which inhabits people from all around the world due to the resource availabilities, job opportunities, hygienic environment and the way of living attracts
more population
Suggestion
most population
towards the country.
Therefore
,
this
huge variety of mixed
culture
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cultures
can lead to enormous benefits as well as safety issues.
Hence
, in many parts of the
country there
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country, there
has been a curfew issued stating that the teenagers are not allowed to be outdoors after a particular time at night unless accompanied by elders. In my opinion the government has taken the best initiative in terms of protection. Teenagers usually between the ages of 15-18 are not completely mature enough to take their own decisions, because their age and
mind set
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
will not listen to parent’s advice as they tend to behave like the masters of the universe and are capable of managing on their own. But in reality when these kids are let out free during the nights, there might be chances that they get into bad company leading to drug addiction and alcohol consumption as children cannot distinguish between the good and bad folks. There have
also
been many cases reported regarding
kidnapping
Suggestion
the kidnapping
and physical abuses that have occurred during
mid-nights
12 o'clock at night; the middle of the night
midnight
, especially with children in
this
age group. Theft is another major crime that targets these
kids which
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kids, which
can
also
lead to loss of life. In conclusion, if the teenagers are accompanied by elders, parents or guardians, they will not be approached by any of the criminals, their activities can be monitored and they will remain in a secure zone. In case of any emergency or help required, parents will be present there to guide them and get them home to safety.

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