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“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree?

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We have seen many medical specialists advising their patients to adopt precautionary measures to avoid illness. These measures safeguard the humans from harmful diseases. Most of the times, these diseases are spread due to human negligence.
Instead
 of investing in diagnosing the treatments, it is better to create an
awareness
 among the community to take
care
 of health and
hygiene
.
Moreover
, the government should legislate the policy in terms of adapting safety standards at all levels. I completely agree with the statement that intensive
care
 is very important
instead
 of treatment.
First
 of all, the viruses are spread mostly due to human negligence. We do not
care
 about our surroundings and keep them polluted. Common illnesses are caused by not taking
care
 of our environment. Health practitioners advise their patients to adopt healthy practices of health and
hygiene
.
For example
,
major reason
Suggestion
a major reason
the major reason
 for
wide spread
Suggestion
the wide spread
 of Malaria is due to poor sanitation system in our country. Every year, millions of rupees are spent in curing
this
virus but
Accept comma addition
virus, but
 no measures are taken to improve the sanitation system.
Secondly
,
awareness
 among the community is
also
 very important. Public service
messages play
Accept comma addition
messages, play
vital role
Suggestion
a vital role
 in
this
 regard. Recently, we have seen
news
Suggestion
the news
 regarding Corona virus infecting many countries. The cure for the disease is still not confirmed, but the media is promoting
hygiene
 practices in order to avoid the virus.
Moreover
, the government should implement
hygiene
awareness
 at all levels. Proper sessions should be conducted to give
awareness
 to the community. In additions to
this
, the government should impose fine to those who do not follow the practices. To conclude, I believe that
instead
 of investing and researching for the cure of illness; it is better to follow health and
hygiene
 at all levels. The resources utilized in research should be used in
awareness
 programs. Resultantly, we will be able to give healthy living environment to children.

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