the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
The map illustrates
about
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the road access for hospitals in a town between the period from 2007 to 2010.
Firstly
, the city hospital is surrounded by the ring road and there were six
bus
stops
besides
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the
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Hospital Rd.
Overall
, from the two maps can compare that City Hospital and the staff car park remained in the same place.
On the other hand
, in 2010, seen that the administration
has
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changed the area around the hospital.
Moreover
, there is seen some differences like
public
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car park and staff car park is in different places,
also
included roundabout on the way, there
is
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seen two roundabouts, one is the below
in
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city roadway and another is in up attached
with
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the Hospital Rd.
Bus
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The bus
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station is larger than the previous one and it is open
for
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two sides. In one lane
bus
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will enter
in
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the
bus
station and the other side is open for going out.
To sum up
, the modifications around the hospital it is useful for the people
and
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as well as
for the doctors and
staffs
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staff
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.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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