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The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world, especially in this era of technology. Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics. How much can we trust the journalists? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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In a democratic
countries
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country
 where media consider as a fourth pillar of democracy. The press reporters are mainly responsible to
driven
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drive
 in the matters and gather authentic news for the public.
However
, due to uncertain incidents occur
this days
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these days
this day
 where a
media
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medium
are sold
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is sold
 out to the corrupt politicians has raised the questions over the loyalty of journalism. Primarily, in the modern era media had changed a lot where
prevously
at an earlier time or formerly
previously
 newspapers are the only source of news for common
people but
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people, but
 now there are many TV channels and news apps are
came
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coming
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
existance
the state or fact of existing
existence
 which provide
latest news
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the latest news
 at 24/7 which is
accessable
capable of being reached
accessible
 from anywhere. Under
such
 circumstances news distribution
has became
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has become
 a business for many people,
moreover
, It is used as weapon by many political parties to destroy their oppositions.
For example
,
Accept space
,
 in a recent event where a democratic party has circulated false
propoganda
information that is spread for the purpose of promoting some cause
propaganda
 against the other political party which eventually cost them a defeat in elections.
In addition
, with current
scenario it
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scenario, it
 is hard to believe at any report which was provided by
journalist
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journalists
a journalist
the journalist
,
Furthermore
,
such
 unrealistic news
also
 distracting the people from the truth of
devastating situation
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the devastating situation
a devastating situation
 of the country’s growth by showing fake information with the people. Journalism has lost
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 ethics nowadays and
its
it is
it's
 better to avoid them to protect from misleading information. In conclusion,
although
 media
person
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personalities
are play
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are playing
have played
 a vital role in
yeilding
inclined to yield to argument or influence or control
yielding
 updated news from all around the world,
however
,
this
 day it has
became
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become
 a business for power hunger leaders and affluent people’s so it’s essential for common people to keep
distance
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a distance
 from fake journalism.
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